What do you think of my poem?

This story is full with excitement and suspense. It has an urgency that makes the reader want to go on. But Dr. Seuss tales, I think had happier endings. If this is for a child to read, many a parent would find themselves seeking therapy for their little angel. (lol) I suggest it not be quite so graphic on tragic mishaps and end with Zeut being a hero or at least in some way successful at his flying.